Wednesday, January 14, 2009

just between our eyes

your eyes tell me
you still want more

of my creamy

so cream me dry
cream me more

make my eyes
scream for more

7 comments:

Niel Camhalla said...

you still want more

of my creamy


creamy what? parang bitin ending with an adjective...

baka typo
of my cream

or
of my creamy eye
rhymes with dry

gentle said...

hehehe. creamy in this case is not an adjective but stands (no pun intended) as a noun. need i say more? thanks for the critique, neil! always appreciated. :)

Niel Camhalla said...

ay bastos! so you intentionally dropped the word dahil bastos? hahaha.

gentle said...

nope. didnt drop anything! read it again with creamy as a noun and you'll get a whole different perspective. hehehe. :)

- litol figgy - said...

haha. ayus. galeng!:)

gravity said...

this sounds sexy to me =)

Victor Gregor said...

cream me more, scream for more. lovely alliteration. I'm linking you. nice blog.